Rough Cut Audience Feedback

This is the video in which we asked a variety of people to watch our rough cut all the way through, followed by answering a series of questions in which we created. These questions were;
1. What did you like and what would you say was your favourite aspect of the opening?
2. Did you notice any of the editing used in the sequence? (e.g continuity editing/distinctive breaks)
3. Would you change or improve anything from the clip?
4. Did you think the ellipses sequence was effective?
5. Did you think the length was appropriate? (e.g too long/too short)
6. Did the music suit the content?
7. At the beginning of the sequence, was the concept of the radio and the meat clear? (e.g representing the murder)

Judging by the feedback we received, our piece worked effectively in presenting our ideas about the murder and the victim in the bag, suiting the thriller genre we aimed to present. Our music choice worked well in creating the tense atmosphere and assisted the way in which we cut shots to move onto the next one on particular beats in time to the music. Our ellipses sequence worked well by presenting the shear amount of people involved in the passing of the bag, condensed into a short amount of time that was creative and intriguing to watch, especially as it included random people and increased the realism of the piece. However, a point to pick up on, along with the positives of the ellipses sequence, was the comments that there may have been too many people involved. This meant that some viewers felt that the clip dragged on too much and wondered when it would finish, as well as the beginning part when the butcher cuts up the meat. Many viewers most enjoyed the mystery created by the red bag, and how you never actually see what's inside it, making them wonder where it will end up and who for, based on the wide variety of people carrying it. A clip improve on would be when the bus passes Cam, and when it does he disappears, leaving the bag behind. We could do this by playing around with the speed of the bus passing by, as it starts slow, speeds up and slows down again. This has been noticed by the viewers and doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the sequence due to how abrupt the shot is compared to the precision of the rest of the shots. We could also improve the transition and flow of a series of shots near the beginning of the piece when my grandpa walks out of the butchers. We could do this by lengthening the shot when he is shown going through the door, allowing him to walk a couple steps more, and then cut to the over the shoulder shot when he is walking down the street. Overall, the length of the sequence could be condensed a bit due to the viewers feeling it drags on a little, along with the need to re-edit the bus clip, however our ideas worked effectively and the ellipses sequence created a mysterious attribution to our video, assisted well by the music throughout.